My Review of ‘The Silver Chain’ by Primula Bond

Zero Stars – DNF

Could. Not. Do. It. DNF.

At last. At last. I tried once, twice, then was jolted from my insistence by a flash of rationality. You don’t have to read it! Therefore, I will write this review, withhold judging via stars, and move on to better reads. Ugh.

I could not get into the author’s writing. I don’t mind present tense, but the constant use of fragments and stream of consciousness style (while not wrong — there is no wrong, only preference) was just too abrupt, repetitive, and annoying.

In addition, much of the grammar and sentence structure is just plain weird and awkward. For a while, I’ve had this ARC from NetGalley for my honest opinion, but I’ve held off writing a review because I kept trying to read it.

No more, I beg, no more.

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5 thoughts on “My Review of ‘The Silver Chain’ by Primula Bond

    1. That’s the thing, I could never get into the story because the language was so awkward, and not because she’s British. It just weird. It starts off–

      “At last. At last. We jolt once, twice, then start to move.”

      “As the distance stretches between us to breaking point the muscles in my shoulders, my eyebrows, teeth, my jaw, even my hair, all start to let go, relax.”

      “All at once, on a silent signal, they break formation like synchronized swimmers, scattering like ducks startled by gunshot, then equally neatly they rejoin forces again and zig-zag briskly onwards. There’s the faint scattering of small, imperfect feet on the gritty pavement, the tip of the crocodile’s tail whisks around the corner. And then they are gone.”

      Wow, the trick or treaters are compared to swimmers, ducks, and then croc tails in two sentences. Holy baloney! I love metaphors, but pick one and stick with it. Not technically wrong, but it makes one’s head spin. It’s considered mixing metaphors.

      Plus, it really is a no-no to put to adverbs back to back. ‘equally neatly’? That’s a mouthful and considered amateur hour.

      I just couldn’t read anymore, and when I can’t finish a book and don’t consider it few to give a star to bring down the book’s rating. But it would’ve probably been a 1 star. I do my best to separate story from grammar, but if the grammar is this bad then, for me, it’s like watching a fuzzy TV.

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      1. Okay, I understand now. I read one that used a lot of British slang and it was hard to understand, but the story was so good. I kept reading it.

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  1. Not the double adverb……….noooooooooooooooooooooooo!!!!!!!!! *tearing hair out* That’s really the last straw. You know what’s worse…I saw a double adverb in a photo caption 2 weeks ago… in the NEW YORK TIMES. God help us all.

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